Assignment 5
1. Make your own group (peer group) consists of two persons.
2. Give correction (about quotation, classification, or definition or other related issues) to your partner writing. But remember, in one's writing, there are at least two quotations in each paragraph. If not, provide a correction on that too. Another correction would be on writer's point of view (whether you write what you can summarize from quotations).
3. Post your friend's correction about your writing on the comment page!
The deadline is Thursday, 28 November 2013.
Wa Ode Nisrawati
BalasHapusA1D2 10 004
My title is "The Effect of Blogging on Essay Writing Performance of English Department Learners in Halu Oleo University". In its literature review, it has 4 aspects. They are the nature of writing, the aspects of writing, the definition of essay writing, and the use of blog in EFL Writing.
My partner, JULIANI has commented on my writing. Here are Juliani's comments:
"About literature review, most of the content give many opinions of the experts related to the topic. whether that is : the nature of writing, the aspects of writing, the definition of essay writing, and the use of blog in EFL Writing. All of the point above has completed definition, classification, and quotation. But I think I need ore explanation about opinion by expert so it can be more clear"
Juliani
BalasHapusA1D2 10 050
IMPROVING STUDENTS' WRITING ABILITY THROUGH PICTURE MEDIA
The outlines of Literature Review: Picture Media in Writing Skill, Kinds of Picture Media, How to Motivation of Students through Picture Media in Writing Skill, Advantage of Picture in Writing Skill
My Partner, Wa Ode Nisrawati gives her comments:
"Because your proposal about writing skill, I think you have to put first about the point theory of writing itself, not only the theory of picture media using in writing skill. and about the theory from experts, you have put some theories, but I think it is not enough because there are 2 part of your literature review that didn't have any theory, they are "Kinds of Picture Media" and "How to Motivation of Students through Picture Media in Writing Skill"
ISMAWATI (A1D210048)
BalasHapusTHE EFFECT OF THINK ALOUD STRATEGY TOWARD STUDENTS READING SKILL: STUDY AT 9 GRADE SMP NEGERI 10 KENDARI IN ACADEMIC YEAR 2013/2014
From the title above, I have included 4 topics in literature review about what I want to tell in my writing. The topics are : 1) Theory of think aloud, 2) Using of think aloud, 3) The nature of reading, 4) Aspect of Reading Comprehension.
In this assignment, my friend “JUWIANTI” has given me some corrections about my writing. The correction are following:
“Your topic is very interesting and it is so clear for us to understand the strategy through the explanation in Literature review. But, there are some weaknesses in your literature review, first is, there is no classification about the strategy that you use, we just look more explanation and the function about it. The second is, in one's writing, it should be consists of at least two quotations in each paragraph, but in your writing there are some paragraph that consists only one quotation or one theory from experts and it has long explanation that has related meaning with the other quotations or theories. Besides the weaknesses, I like about the clear explanation about the “think aloud strategy” and “reading comprehension”, because it related to your topic. :) :) !!!”
IDA YANI
BalasHapusA1D2 11 028
THE IMPROVING VOCABULARY STUDENTS ABILITY BY USING SERIES OF PICTURE
My partner is Fatmawati (A1D2 11 028) and this is his comment:
1. in the first part"what is definition of vocabulary" it is only has three quotation while in each paragraph have at least two quotation and then she combine it with her own idea about the definition.
2. in the second part" how to improve vocabulary students ability" the first paragraph she has five ways but she did not mention where does she get the ways. is it from expert or her own idea and the second paragraph she better put it in the first paragraph.
3. in the third part"technique of teaching vocabulary using series of picture" it is only has one quotation by Rahman Aulia.
4. in the last part"how to use series of picture in vocabulary" she just use wise statement" I hear I forget, I see I know, I do I understand"
NAME: FATMAWATI
BalasHapusOFF.NO :A1D211039
IMPROVING STUDENTS SPEAKING SKILL TROUGH EXTENSIVE READING
In my task, my partner Ida Yani had give me some corrections :
( 1. in the first paragraph part 1 "what is extensive reading has 3 quotation and the second only has 1 quotation. she combine expert idea related to the content
2. the second part " what are the principals of extensive reading . each point only has 1 expert idea and the one point she dont add expert idea about how to get the word "hooked
3. in the third part "how can extensive reading impact to student speaking skill" she jast make 1 long paragraph , she better divide into two paragraph and i found about 6 expert idea and related to the content
4. the last " how fast does extensive reading impact to student speaking skill" in first paragraph has one expert idea and the second has two expert idea" )
ERNAWATI
BalasHapusA1D211055
THE EFFECTIVENESS OF TOTAL PHYSICAL RESPONSE IN TEACHING VOCABULARY AT SEVENTH GRADE IN SMP
LITERATURE REVIEW
2.1. Definition of Total Physical Response (TPR) Method
TPR is language teaching method built around the coordination of speech and action; it attemps to teach language through physical (motor) activity. Developed by james Asher, a professor of psychology at san jose state university, California, it draws on several tradition, including development psycology, learning theory, and humanistic pedagogy, as well as on language teaching procedures proposed by Harold and Dorothy palmer in 1925. In a developmental sense, Asher sees successful adult second language learning as a parallel process to child first language acquisition. He claims that speech directed to young children concists primarily of commonds, which children respond to physically before they begin to produce verbal responses. Asher feels that adults should recapitulate the processes by which children acquire their native language.
2.2 Definition of vocabulary
Vocabulary is one of the materials studied by students of all level of
schools in Indonesia. It has been mastered if they want to master English well. It
is impossible to be successful in study language without mastering the vocabulary
2.3 Teaching Vocabulary
Teaching vocabulary plays an important role in language acquisition
because the mastery of vocabulary will help students to master all the language
skills; speaking; listening; writing; and reading. The vocabulary will make the
students practice life and will strengthen belief that English can be used to express the same ideas or feeling they express in their native language (Finochiaro,1974:38)
2.4 The Aims of Teaching Vocabulary Use Total Physical Response
a. Students are not asked to produce in the second language until they
decide they are ready
b. TPR can fill an entire class period with comprehensible input in the
form of commands
c. The students can enjoy to study because TPR method be able to reduce
students stress when learning foreign language.
d. Students remember the lesson longer. Memory is activated thorough
students response.
e. Students feel successful. Feeling of success and low anxiety facilitate
learning.
from this explanation above my partner have give me a comment that' this material is more clearly and right...like the definition about total physical response and vocabulary is clear,next the aims of total physical response in teaching vocabulary is clear too but only does not explain how far the students understand about vocabulary using total physical response method'.
Name : Maria Intan Permata Hati
BalasHapusOff. No : A1D2 10 039
My title is Improving student’s writing ability under process oriented approach at class X1 IA1 of SMA Negeri 2 Raha. In its literature review, it has 4 aspects. They are definition process oriented approach in writing learning process, the relationship between process oriented and writing skill, the tsing process oriented approach in writing skill, the effect process oriented approach in improving student’s writing ability.
My partner Linda Lestari has commented on my writing. Here Linda’s comments: About the literature review, writer use more than one theory to supporting her study. Then, about classification after I read the literature review and connecting with the title “Improving student’s writing ability under process oriented approach at class X1 IA1 of SMA Negeri 2 Raha, and your explain the clasification more good. Last, about definition writer use theory in literature review appropriate with choose title. Such as in Definition Process Oriented Approach in Writing Learning writer use three theory firstly by Garrison in 1964 explains about process oriented approach. Secondly theory by Theory by Pincas in 1982 and Cited in Cellimeri 2001 explains about general steps that must be passed by a writer in process oriented approach.
NAME : NASRIANTI
BalasHapusNIM: A1D211086
THE IMPLEMATSATION OF JIGWAS TECHNIQUE TO IMPROVING READING COMPHERENDION
My partner is Nurul Hidayah(A1D211049)had give me some corrections :
your topic is very interesting, because you give explanation theory and it is so clear for us to understand the strategy through the explanation in Literature review. But, there are some weaknesses in your literature review, first is, there is no classification about the strategy that you use, we just look more explanation and the function about it. The second you should "what students problem? ". and than, I like about the clear explanation about the" strategy of jigwas technique” and “ using jigwas technique in teaching reading in classroom”, because it related to your topic.
The tittle of my research is “The Effects Of Learning English Using The Application Pronouncation”. Ida yani as my partner has corrected my job. this is her correction:
BalasHapusAfter reading your reserch, I conclude that In your research there are many quotations that reinforce your statement, it is good for your writing. But there is one quotation that excessive (outside quotation topic) the quotation is useless. Ithe quotation is "Research has Demonstrated that adults spend 40-50% of communication time listening (Gilman & Moody, 1984), but the importance of listening in language learning has only been recognized companies Relatively recently (Oxford, 1993)."
the classification on your research pretty good, but the explanation in each classification less detail.
My advice, You should not only focus on discussing "the benefits of using a smart phone application" but you can also compare with other methods in your research, so the reader more easily understand that using a smartphone application is indeed very effective compared to other methods.
Nama : linda lestari
BalasHapusStambuk : A1D2 10 093
My title is improving year two student’s speaking achiviement under round robin technique at sma negeri 1 lainea. . In its literature review, it has 4 aspects. They are teaching speaking in english as foreign language, the theory of nature speaking, problem in teaching speaking, definition of round robin technique
My partner Maria Intan Permata Hati has comments for my writing. Here Maria’s comments are your topic is interesting. About the quotation you had put more opinion the experts in teaching speaking in english as foreign language, the theory of nature speaking, problem in teaching speaking, definition of round robin technique and it is connection with your title. Your definition appropriate with your topics but in your classification you must put the advantage the using that technique. So that you must pust the advantage using that technique.
Title :
BalasHapusThe effect of the Cohesive feature in student writing a case of English Department of Halu Oleo University.
The points are : Explanation about cohesive feature, The result of student writing, How much the student's writing improves by some of cohesive feature and
How far the relation of the cohesive feature trough student writing.
Fardan Rezkiawan has corrected my writing and his corrections are:
1. About the quotation the writer just, mention the quotation in first point about the explanation of cohesive feature and there are not quotation in the another point.
2. In the second point it is about” the result of student writing” I think the writer need to give the result of student writing in Halu Oleo University not the result of the student writing from another University, because in you thesis topic you write that “Cohesive feature in student writing a case of English Department of Halu Oleo University.” So you need to give the result of student writing a case of English Department of Halu Oleo University.
3. About the classification, the content of point 3 and 4 are almost same, may be they can be combined. He gives me suggestion to choose the subtopic "how far the relation between students' writing improvement by using cohesive feature."
Name : Bambang Sudarsono
BalasHapusNumber : A1D211003
After checking Anjas Asmara’s work, there are several unclear information about his literarature review. First about four literacy levels. In four literature levels, we only get definition or additional information about performative, functional, informational, and epistemic not the actual aplications in educations term. Second, in the literary review, students in senior high school are expected to produce knowledge using their own language. What happen, if they do not have any ability in state their knowledge. I am pretty sure if they have plenty of knowledge, but they could not state or share those knowledge especially in front of many people. Third, many different kinds of exam tasks that are currently in use are not clear, more deatailed information should be put at the types of the writing exam. So, the reader can easily understood what kind of test is it. Overall, Anjas’s literary review are good but it is lack of detailed information about several items.
Liteterary owner's : Anjas Asmara
Name : Risya Fatimah Zahra
BalasHapusA1D210 015
My partner is Saltri Ariweni A1D210 025, and this is my comment: Based on what I have been learned about how to write a mini proposal, I found on above proposal ("The Effects of Using Constructivist Teaching Models on the Students Reading Comprehension at the First Year of SMA Negeri 9 Kendari.
1. The third paragraph have to be the first. But the writer has to paraporase the main idea of the passage.
2. The correlation each paragraph is not good or there is no correspond between paragraphs.
3. Research question is good but the writer has to remove question number two (What is the student perception towards the use of Using Constructivist Teaching Models in teaching reading?), because not correspond.
4. Literature review not true all. should: design of strategy, previous study, learning about reading, how to promote students learning reading, hypotesa, how about reading.
risya sorry, you should just coment on literature review just do not have the design of strategy, previous studies, learning about reading, how to promote students learning reading, hypotheses, how about reading as a task only focuses on the explanation of the 4 outline from the previous task.
Hapusnama : Fardan Rezkiawan Faida
BalasHapusNIM : A1D2 10 045
my title is THE IMPROVING STUDENTS' WRITING ACHIEVEMENT THROUGH CLUSTERING TECHNIQUE IN SECOND YEAR OF SMAN 2 KONAWE SELATAN. in the literary review, there are 4 points, they are: teaching and learning writing, definition of clustering technique, writing achievement, and the advantages and disadvantages of clustering technique.
my partner Fajar Pudo has corrected and given comment for my writing. these are his comment:
1. about the quotation, there are some quotations in my writing. in the 2nd and 3th points, there are 2 and 3 quotation for each point, but in the 1st and 4th points, there is just 1 quotation for each point. so, in each point, it should be there are at least 2 quotation or more.
2. about the classification, he said that points in the literature review are appropriate with the title of my research.
3.the explanation of the point in literature review is good. each point is explained clearly.
Name : Sri Nurul Ayu (A1D2 11 057)
BalasHapusTHE EFFECT OF WRITE-PAIR-SHARE TECHNIQUE ON THE STUDENTS’ READING ACHIEVEMENT AT THE SEVENTH GRADE OF SMPN 17 KENDARI
1. The Basic of Reading Comprehension
Reading is one of skills in English that we should be mastered. Reading is not read a teks only, but reading established with understanding the meaning of the words, sentence, and paragraph sensing relationship among the ideas. Reading is a process to get information and impression which conveyed by the author in writing aid.
Furthermore, Redway (1992:28) stated that “ Reading comprehension is a comprehension process in grasping idea, assess their contents and connect them to other ideas in written languages ”. Thus, Reading comprehension involve the ability to understand words, sentence structure, the ability to note and remember significant details or find answers to specific question and the ability to make a relationship between his experience and the meaning of written language.
From the explanation, it can concluded that reading comprehension is reading activity to comprehend about the content of the text through the dynamic interaction of the reader’s vocabulary, prior knowledge, the information suggested in the written text, and content of the situation.
2. Characteristic of Cooperative Learning
Slavin (1995: 37) points out that cooperative learning has some characteristic. They are; refers to the group’s success, member’s role emphasized, individual’s accountability, individual’s interaction, and leader together.
The first characteristic is the group’s success. The second characteristic is member’s role emphasized. The third characteristic is individual’s accountability. The fourth characteristic is individual’s interaction.
3. Write-Pair-Share Strategy
Noted by the National Reading Panel (2000) as a strategy that had scientific basis for concluding it could improve reading comprehension in non-impaired readers, cooperative learning has become a staple in many classroom across the country.
One specific cooperative learning strategy is Write-pair-Share technique that was adapted from Think-Pair-Share technique. Write-Pair-Share technique is a collaborative learning strategy in which students work together to solve a problem or answer a question about an assigned reading.
4. Teaching Reading using Write-Pair-Share Technique
The procedure of write pair share technique consists of six steps in its application. They are as follows:
Step 1. Reading
The class reads and discusses of the text with classmates
Step 2. Pairing up to work on a task
Course members form in pairs. They will use the cooperative learning technique namely Write-Pair-Share.
Step 3. Create example
Teacher poses some questions or problems to the students
Step 4. The write step
Each person work alone to write theiranswer without help by anyone for transforming lesson
Step 5. The pair step
Course members in pairs and discuss their answers with their partner. This pair step is an opportunity to practice the collaborative skills of giving and responding to praise.
Step 6. The share step
Course members share some of their pair’s answer with the rest of class.
(adapted from Lyman, 1981 http://faculty.academy.edu.415.618.3855)
My partner is Berlian Kristanti (A1D2 11 061) and her comment:
The explanation of my material is clearly enough. I can elaborate my idea and theory that support my literature review. Also, in this literature review, I have already explained about the implementation and the strategy of write-pair-share technique in classroom. But, I should enter the definition of write-pair-share technique itself so my literature review will be better.
Name: Ivon Wisda Setyaningsi
BalasHapusreg.no: A1D211 05
My friend has corrected my literature review, she tell me to give the introductory sentence, to give framework to the reader, to reduce quotation in each paragraph,and to make point from each sub topic
Editor : Nursaidah
Reg.no : A1D2 11 087
NAME : KARTINI TAHIR
BalasHapusREG. NUMBER : A1D211121
THE TITLE : IMPROVING STUDENTS’ READING COMPREHENSION OF NARRATIVE TEXT THROUGH SUGGESTOPEDIA METHOD
AT SMA NEGERI 7 KENDARI
My partner is Faizah Kesuma (A1D211036) has given me some corrections and her corrections are:
Your topic is very interesting, because you give the explanation theories and it is so clear for me to understand the strategy through the explanation in Literature review. However, there are some weaknesses in your literature review:
Corrections
a. Quotation
“According to Lazanov (1982), Suggestopedia method is a method of teaching that seeks to help learners eliminate psychological barriers to learning….”
It will be better, if you put several authors to suppose your topics. For example, several researches have evaluated the performance of Sugestopedia. Madsen and Hilferty (1985) mentioned that assurances of progress in language learning using Suggestopedia as a method of teaching. Suggestopedia is designed primarily to help learners eliminate psychological barriers to learning (Lazanov, 1982).
b. Classification
Based on your paper, you have made classification deeply related to your topic.
For instead, firstly, you have to focus on the nature of reading before explain the Suggestopedia actually because this topic related to reading comprehension especially narrative text. Second, tried to give classification on narrative text make sure that what your achieved in narrative text indeed. Last, try to relate with your method such as Suggestopedia which does steps, stages, treatment of this point, etc
c. Definition
To begin this point, I supposed that you have a good definition in there. However, you have to know how to explain the topic and related to some researcher are. That’s why, your definition can make sense and interest to the readers.
name: Nursaidah
BalasHapusoff.no: A1D211087
My title is The Effects of Jigsaw Technique on Student's Reading Interest and my friend give me correction namely, I have to make rewrite the quotation in correct form, and give more explanation in the last point about factor influencing students reading interest.
editor: ivon wisda setyaningsi
reg.no: A1D211 059
NAME : FAIZAH KESUMA
BalasHapusREG.NO : A1D211036
The title of my research : Improving Student’s Summary Writing Skills Using A Class Blog at English Study Program, UHO
Outlines : 1.) Blog ( definition, why using blog ?, type of activities, how to apply this method ), 2.) The using of Blog in Language Learning, 3.) Summary Writing Skill, 4.) Previous Studies in This Area of research.
Examiner : Kartini Tahir, and here is her comment :
1.) The big problem I found from this work is about quotation. The author seems a little bit confuse about how to quote someone’s statement. It will be better if the author do the “ paraphrase “ then just directly quote someone’s statements, or use words “ cited in “ when you took one’s quote from someone else’s work.
> Before corrected : Ferdig & Trammell ( 2004 ) stated that “ Blogs are very effective tools in teaching and learning since they provide students with an environment that helps students reflect and publish their own thoughts in form of writing “.
> After corrected : In the other words, blog is an effective media in teaching and learning process because it provides students a good atmosphere where they can reflect and express their ideas in written form ( Ferdig & Trammel, 2004 )
2.) The author mentioned about type of activities in blog and how to apply it, but she does not give further explanation about it. It will be better if she tries to find out more about it by reading more resources.
my tittle is "THE EFFECT OF THINK ALOUD STRATEGY TOWARD STUDENTS READING SKILL: STUDY AT 9TH GRADE SMP NEGERI 2 KENDARI IN ACADEMIC YEAR 2013/2014". it is literature review which consist; the definition of think aloud strategy,theory which used in think aloud strategy,how to use this strategy in reading skill, and aspect of reading comprehension in using think aloud strategy
BalasHapusmy partner, Alfiansyah has comment my literature review and he is comments :
from his literature review when I see the parts of his literature review, the content most of to study the using of think aloud strategy in reading comprehension and the one of his literature review to learn about the definition and aspects reading comprehension which to use the think aloud strategy. and I think his literature review has enough easy to understand because in his literature review, he is to express the definition and the using of think aloud strategy in reading comprehension. and it is enough interest
my tittle is "THE EFFECT OF THINK ALOUD STRATEGY TOWARD STUDENTS READING SKILL: STUDY AT 9TH GRADE SMP NEGERI 2 KENDARI IN ACADEMIC YEAR 2013/2014". it is literature review which consist; the definition of think aloud strategy,theory which used in think aloud strategy,how to use this strategy in reading skill, and aspect of reading comprehension in using think aloud strategy
BalasHapusmy partner, Alfiansyah has comment my literature review and he is comments :
from his literature review when I see the parts of his literature review, the content most of to study the using of think aloud strategy in reading comprehension and the one of his literature review to learn about the definition and aspects reading comprehension which to use the think aloud strategy. and I think his literature review has enough easy to understand because in his literature review, he is to express the definition and the using of think aloud strategy in reading comprehension. and it is enough interest
ZULKIFLI (A1D208070)
Astiah adil
BalasHapusA1D2 11 066
In my proposal entitles “the use of animation film for developing students’
writing skill of narrative texts at SMAN 1 Rahah” which have 4 outlines of literary review as follows:
1. General concept of film
2. General Concept of Writing
3. Film As Visual Aids in Teaching Writing
4. General Concept of Narrative Text
My friend nuraida safitri give me some correction about my literary review as follow :
“you start with definition of film, in which, you include just 1 quotation of microsoft Encarta (2006),actually you should include minimum 2 or more quotation by experts and you should put the definition of narrative in the first outline ,because narrative text is the main focus of your proposal. Then, the outline in part 2, about type of film, this will better if you add the example of each type of film. The outline 3,4 about film as visual aid and general concept of narrative text you put quotation just 1 again. This make your proposal has weakness.”
Nuraida safitri
BalasHapusA1D2 11 066
EFFECTIVENESS OF EXTENSIVE READING TO STUDENT’S READING ABILITY IN ENGLISH LASSROOM AT HALUOLEO UNIVERSITY
The outlines of my literature review are: definition of extensive reading, the differences between Intensive reading and extensive reading, the role of extensive reading in language learning, characteristic of ER in language learning.
In my literary review my friend astiah adil has given her comment. The comment as follows :
“Your decision to choose topic about extensive reading is very good. You have given clear explanation about extensive reading itself. You have integrated some quotation that related to extensive reading in every paragraph. However, there are some aspects that you have to fix. In your literary review, there are too many details about extensive reading, but you do not give any explanation about reading. You should give elaboration about definition of reading, process of reading, or how reading teaching in the classroom. Since it is very important thing in write a literary review, you have to give clear explanation in every term of your proposal. “
My partner is Sinta Sridewi S. She had looked my thesis and gave some corrections on it. This is what she said:
BalasHapusThe Error analysis on English word order in writing English sentences done by mostly students
The classification of the thesis is good enough. Although, the first classification is a bit unclear. The term grammar should be apart from the sentences. In other words, the definition of sentences would best be given under the term definition of sentences instead of grammar. Almost every paragraph has quotations in it, although most of the paragraphs have only one quotation in it. I’d like to comment on this one : This definition is paraphrase by Hockett (1958:199) as a constitute which is not construction with any other grammatical form.
When the writer said “paraphrase from”, it should be clear from where did the quotation was paraphrased ?
In terms of definition, the writer gave clear definitions concerning some terms. However, the term “grammar for writing” was not explained plainly. Under the “grammar for writing” the writer should be talking about the role of grammar in writing more than just mentioning teacher’s action againts the errors.
To correct my work, i teamed with Novia Hadi .A.M. this is what she said about my thesis :
BalasHapusA COMPARATIVE STUDY BETWEEN MURDER TECHNIQUE AND THREE PHASE TECHNIQUE IN THE TEACHING OF READING
Elviana provide some clear definition toward the terms she defined. He also has a good point of view concerning the terms. The way she pointed out her ideas is interesting to me.
In terms of classification, since she is comparing two techniques in her research, i think she should provide two clear classification about the process of reading she meant, whether it is process of reading within the MURDER technique or under the technique of three phase technique. Furthermore, to talk about the definition, I don’t get the point of the writer’s defining the approaches to reading. I do not think that these approaches has direct connection with her title. More importantly, I did not find any definition about MURDER technique and Three phase technique or how did they correlate to reading, which she should have defined in this chapter.
There are some quotations in the thesis and there was no problem with the way she wrote them. However, these quotation cannot be found in every paragraph since only several paragraphs contained quotations.
MARDHIYAH MUCHTAR (A1D2 11 052)
BalasHapusMy title is “Improving Students’ Speaking Ability by Doing English Conversation Group in Class XI at SMA Negeri 4 Kendari”, consist of Definition of Speaking and English Conversation Group, How does English conversation group can affect speaking ability, How to apply English conversation group in classroom, How effective this method in improving speaking ability
My partner Tiara Vebriani thought that the first part (Definition of Speaking and English Conversation Group) of my literature review is good because there are more than three quotes here and it get paraphrased well. But I should add more quote in definition of English Conversation Group. The methods are alright and she can understand it fast. At last, she thought that the last part (How Effective this Method to Improve Speaking Ability) is good but too short, so I have to add some information again.
I am paired with Elviana. She provided me some correction in relation to my thesis and here are her comments :
BalasHapusIMPROVING STUDENTS SPEAKING ABILITY BY INTEGRATING POST-READING BRAINSTORMING WITH SPEAKING ACTIVITY AT SENIOR HIGH SCHOOL 4 KENDARI
In relation to her title, these are the terms Novia defined in her thesis:
• Reading and Post-Reading Activity
• Brainstorming Activity
• Integrating Speaking and Post-Reading Brainstorming Activity
• Students’ Improvement on Speaking
In terms of classification, I think the writer should add some clarifications or definition about the speaking activity she mentioned in her thesis, also what she meant by speaking ability and what do experts say about that. This paper is lack of quotation. There are some paragraphs contain no quotation. I do not think there is a problem with the way she present the quotation, though. Furthermore, the writer need to add some more explanation about the integrated speaking and post-reading activity, like what would the combination look like ?
One thing i like about this thesis is that she provide not only definition but also the finding of previous research in relation to her topic.
Tiara Vebriani
BalasHapus(A1D2 11 056)
My partner is Mardhiyah Muchtar. She said that my title is interesting and seems quite good to understand (the title is The Use of English Movie to Improve Students’ Vocabulary at SMP N 5 Kendari, parts: Definition of Vocabulary, General Concept of Movie, Why Movies are Chosen, Method of Learning English Movies). The general concept about vocabulary and English movie are arranged neatly because there are some quotes here and its explanation, and also the paraphrasing parts are easy to understand. The classification of methods here is simple but she can catch what it is mean. But in the part “Why movies are chosen” and “Methods of Learning English Movies”, it should be added with some expert quotes or quotes from previous research, because there are many researches about the using of English movie to improve learning process.
My partner is Anna Nurawalia. This is her correction about my thesis:
BalasHapusIMPROVING STUDENTS WRITING SKILL BY INTEGRATING SPEAKING WITH WRITING ACTIVITY AT JUNIOR HIGH SCHOOL 10 KENDARI
Sinta has done a good job with her thesis. She provided some clear definition about the terms related to her title. She also gave some personal comments concerning the terms. These are the classification she provide in her thesis :
• Definition of writing
• Speaking Activities
• Integrating Speaking and Writing
What’s lack from her thesis is that the quotation was not provided in every paragraph. Furthermore, I believe she should first define what is speaking before start talking about speaking activities. The explanation about the combination of speaking and writing was not so clear. In addition, she did not provide any information about what previous research found about the such matter. More importantly, she did not clarify whether or not this thesis is an experimental one.
THE EFFECTS OF USING INTERNET MEDIA IN LEARNING PROCESS
BalasHapusMY OUTLINES :WHAT IS INTERNET?, INTRODUCE INTERNET IN SCHOOL,HOW TO APPLY INTERNET and THE INFLUENCES INTERNET TO IMPROVE ENGLISH SKILL
MY partner AGUNG DANA
agung's comment : firstly, there is no any quotetion in this literature review. it would be better for the writer to put the expert's quotetion in this literature review to strengthen the ideas.
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BalasHapusName : I Made Rian Irwanto
BalasHapusReg. No : A1D2 11 101
I has corrected and given comment for cahyu's work. These are my comment:
1. About the quotation, there are some quotations in his literature review. In the first and second points there is just one quotation for each point, I think it should be there are at least two or more quotations for each point to make it good. Moreover, in the third and fourth points there are two and three quotation for each point.
2. About the classification, the points in his literature review are appropriate with his title. The first point is the definition of poster, the second point is effectiveness of the use of poster, the third point is the relationship between poster and vocabulary enrichment, and the last point is the application of poster in improving student's vocabulary.
3. About the definition, I think his definition about poster is not enough, because there are not quotations from the expert, it just put quotation from the dictionary. But, the other point of his literature review is good, he explained clearly.
Nurul Hidayah (A1D2 11 049)
BalasHapusThis is my comment after read Nasrianti (A1D2 11 086)'s paper:
I think that you chose a good topic that familiar with us, and it can be good if we can apply it on PPL. But I think some of the words in your literature review are plagiarism, because in your thesis you take someone words without giving proper credit, and also important thing is that you need to paraphrase every sentences that you got from another article or thesis/or someone's quotes, and you have to be keep focused to the main topic itself and don't jump to another topic
Name : Agung Dana
BalasHapusReg. Number : A1D211020
Laode muhammad idris has a good topic and it is very interesting. The writer has already explained generally about "what is internet" itself. After reading Laode Muhammad Idris' s literature review, I can find there are some mistakes in this literature review. firstly, there is no any expert's quotation in this literature review. It would be btter for the writer to put quotetion from the expert related to his topic in his literature review. Secondly, the writer does not make previous with the current study related. The use of linking the previous and current study is to inform or to tell the readers about the relationshop between the study itself. Thirdly, the writer should explain briefly and more spesific about jow to apply thia method in class, especially in indonesia or in Writer's hometown. In thia literatire review, the writer only explain about the method in general explanation. Overall, the writer has already took a good topic and the writer has given his good literature review.
Literary owner's : Bambang Sudarsono
BalasHapuswhen i saw bambang's literary review, there are several unclear information about his literarature review. First, we dont know what actually about Face-to-face method, thats why we are too hard to understand this work and the second, Electronic Discussion we dont know actually about this method and there are too many problem when we use it, we should make sure the network is running good. I am sure if they have plenty of knowledge, but they could not state or share those knowledge especially in front of many people. . So, the reader can easily understood what kind of test is it. Overall, Anjas’s literary review are good but it is needed of detail information the method
my partner is Risya Fatimah Zahra ( A1 D2 10 015 ) is titled " The Effect of Task Based Learning on Student English Achievement "
BalasHapuscomentar I was in the paragraph 2 , Topic - based or theme - based instruction raises a few challenges to the instructor . It should also write anything on a challenge for instructors , so that the reader better understand the purpose of the sentence .
I 'm sorry, but after reading your literature reviw , ( risya ) I did not find what skill or skills to use what you focus on, for example, in the reading task , the task in speaking or what kind of skills do you mean in the task . Should be in your title , write " The Effect of Task Based Learning on Student Achievement English ( in reading or another )
And than in the paragraph 4 , i think it can be good if in write also about the topic - based, content-based and project - based approaches so that readers understand the topic - based, content-based and project - based approaches .
I did not read the topic of the deficiency in the Task Based Learning , all of the advantages of the Task Based Learning is described by experts as prabhu , Ellis and others.
I guess that's my comentar The Effect of Task Based Learning on Student Achievement in English literature review discussion belongs Risya Fatimah Zahra. by SALTRI ARIWENI ( A1 D2 10 025)
Name : Wa Miani
BalasHapusReg. number : A1D2 09 091
Assignment of Writing IV
In my writing entitles “Students’ Mastery In English Passive Voice at SMA N 2 Kendari
which have four outlines of literary review as follows: concept of passive voice, system of forming passive sentence, verb in passive sentence, classification in using passive voice.
My friend Muliani ahmad gives me some correction about my literary review as follow :
“ Based on literature review I think is good, but definition of passive voice here is a kind of sentence where its subject roles as object. And also have some similarities in the contemplation of universality of language. And I think this is very needed many tenses which using passive voice”.
name : Herman Ema
BalasHapusnim: A1D211093
after corrected by Syafrizal, my proposal was gotten some statement from him, namely:
Good job herman, your skrip support with some direct method that the teacher always implemented in the class, namely:
a. Classroom instructions are conducted exclusively in the target language
b. Both speech and listening comprehensions are taught
c. Correct pronunciation and grammar are emphasized
d. Student should be speaking approximately 80% of the time during the lesson
e. Students are taught from inception to ask questions as well as answer them
Your skrip also support with a result that has evidenced ”The direct method can improve the students ability especially in speaking based on the research in SMPN2 KUTAWALUYA KARAWANG by Jejen Jaenudin.”
Name: Titin Astina
BalasHapusReg. No: A1D2 11 043
Pemerika : Innastya Jimersita KPM.
The part that get some correction is :
In this chapter will discuss about the nature of speaking, the meaning of speaking, the function of speaking, the aspect of speaking ability, and macro and micro skill of speaking ability.
1. The Nature of Speaking Ability
Brown (in Islamiyah, 2007, p. 14) states that speaking is a productive skill that can be directly and empirically observed, those observations are invariably collared by the accuracy and fluency. While, he also states that speaking is the product of creative construction of linguistic strings, the speakers make choices of lexicon, structure, and discourse.
Poerdarminta (in Islamiyah, 2007, p. 14) states that the classical meaning of speaking is the ability to talk, and to speak. The main purpose of speaking is to send the message for the other one or to be able to communicate about something in language and understood by someone who becomes a listener.
Tarigan (in Islamiyah, 2007, p. 14) states that speaking is one of the language skills in oral form to express the speakers’ ideas to everybody else. While, speaking is the informal interchange of thought and information by spoken words.
and
Based on the above statement, Bygate in Fauzi (2012, p. 5) distinguishes that “between motor-perceptive skill, which are concerned with correctly using the sound and structures of language, and interactional skill, which involves motor perceptive skill for the purpose of communication” motor perceptive skill are developed in the language classroom through activities such as model dialogues, patterns practice, oral drills and so on, until relatively recently, it was assumed that the mastery of motor perceptive skill was that needed all one, in order to communicated successfully.
Name: Syafrizal
BalasHapusNim: A1D211095
Herman's comets about my topic are :
1. In your proposal, there are some Indonesian language that is mentioned. So, to write the English proposal it will be a problem in your proposal. Then you have to be careful to write a research proposal.
2. That is good to put the previous researchers in your proposal to support your opinion.
3. The last one is about your title, it will be useless to research the general problem because what is your purpose to research that everybody knows. You need to choose a specific topic.
But overall the writing that is done by Syafrizal is good.
MUHAMAD HALIL (A1D2 11 081)
BalasHapusTITLE: PERFORMING GAME ACTIVITY TO IMPROVE STUDENTS’ MASTERY OF VOCABULARY..
IWAN SUPRIYATNO was the one who give comment and correction on the part of LITERATURE REVIEW of my PROPOSAL. The correction was as follow:
"There are too much small paragraphs on you literature review, so you need to unite them because the contents are still related one and another, thus there is no need of separation. Some of the small paragraph are also not support with theory or quote from expert. You need to add some theory, at least two in each paragraph to strengthen your opinion about the topic you are talking about.
About the qualification, I think you've done a good work there. You divide the article into several important topics. Well done"
IWAN SUPRIYATNO (A1D2 11 051)
BalasHapusThe title of my proposal is: THE IMPLEMENTATION OF APPROXIMATIVE SYSTEMS OF FOREIGN LANGUAGE IN TEACHING OF SPEAKING SKILL FOR ELEVENTH GRADE STUDENTS OF SMAN 5 KENDARI
Halil have commented my literature review of my proposal. The comment is as follow:
“I think you have a good literature review, but there still some weakness in your literature review. Firstly, you need to add more quotation or theory, because there are some paragraphs and statements that do not supported by theory. Second one, you need to improve the sentence structure of yours. You will have a better proposal if you develop your sentence with various ways.
Name : Muliani
BalasHapusStudent off Number : A1D2 09 027
Assignment : Writing IV
THE EFFECT OF GENRE BASED APPROACH ON STUDENTS’ ABILITY IN WRITING PERSONAL RECOUNT TEXT AT SMA NEGERI 2 KENDARI
My partner is Wa Miani has given me some corrections, and she is comments: “I think your topic is interesting and have many clear definitions to understand it with some quotations but there are some weaknesses in your literature review. First, there are some paragraphs that have not quotation such as in part two in paragraph one and paragraph three. Second, there are some paragraphs that have only one quotation such as in part one paragraph three, part three all of the paragraphs just have one quotation. Third, in part three especially in paragraphs two you should put kinds of genre itself before put their purposes so the explanation can make the reader more understand it. All of over your writing not bad”.
LM. ADI CAHYU KAMSYAR (A1D211083)
BalasHapusAfter checking and correcting my paper, my friend I Made Rian Irwanto, concluded that my Literature Review paper entitles The Use of Poster in the Teaching of Vocabulary at SMA Negeri 1 Kendari has at least three weaknesses.
First is about the literacy levels. We only get the definition or additional information about performative, functional, informational, and epistemic, not the actual applications of poster in its education term.
Second is about the literary review. Students in senior high school are expected to produce knowledge using their own way of producing words. He is pretty sure that they have plenty vocabularies, but they could not state or share those vocabularies.
Third and the last is about the strength of the information. There are some unclear detail information which would not enable the reader reaching their comprehension, especially for this topic.
The use picture to teaching E nglish vocabulary
BalasHapusMy partner is Eyn Fitasari (A1D2 11 085) and this is her comment:
1. In any point doesn’t have conclusion
2. in the types of vocabulary there is not have definition she just mention two types of vocabulary. Active vocabulary and passive vocabulary.
The analysis of theme of novel “ a case of need” by Michael Chrichton
BalasHapusMy partner is Wa ode Marsina ( A1D2 11 089) and this is her coment:
1.in the first part have two quotation but you must make a conclusion
2. in the second part “ description of novel” there is not have the classification.
Waode Sri Muliati N. (A1D211054)
BalasHapus"The Influence of discussion technique on the students' reading ability at the eight grade students of smp n 1 kabaena"
after reading my paper and corecting it, my patner, Ernawati said that there is some mistakes in my paper particularly in the research methodology. there is no clear reason from her, but he revealed that my research methodology should be clear. what is meant by her is that there should be the obeject of my research, the subject(clear subject or to whom my research is created for), and then the assesment methodology is still not good because the reability is not strong enough. on the other hand, ernawati stated that my title and the content of my paper have a correlation to each other. he pointed it by seeing it on my introduction, because I give some reason about my own experience because I think that it has correlation between my experience and the title of my paper. but, actually, overall is good, especially in the sentence structure like the grammatical, vocabulary choice, and the punctuation. so, I'm so thank full to mrs. ernawati
NAME : JUWIANTI
BalasHapusREG.NO : A1D2 10 068
THE EFFECTS OF USING INTERACTIVE WORD WALLS
TO TEACH VOCABULARY AT SECOND GRADE STUDENT SMP NEGERI 4 RANOMEETO IN ACADEMIC YEAR 2013/2014
From the title above, I have included 4 outlines/ topics in literature review , there are :
A. KNOWING VOCABULARY
B. THE IMPORTANCE OF VOCABULARY
C. THE RALATIONSHIP BETWEEN READING COMPREHENSION AND VOCABULARY DEVELOPMENT.
D. THE EFFECTIVE VOCABULARY INSTRUCTION USE WORD WALL
My Partner, “ISMAWATI” gives her comments :
“From Your topics /oulines about “THE EFFECTS OF USING INTERACTIVE WORD WALLS TO TEACH VOCABULARY AT SECOND GRADE STUDENT SMP NEGERI 4 RANOMEETO” is not very clearly , for example : in the point four you didn’t explained more what “ THE EFFECTIVE VOCABULARY INSTRUCTION USE WORD WALL” because in this point is very important we know as reader. After that, I think you must put more theory again that conduct your title and also you must put one outline again about” what is word wall itself” because it’s very important for you and help us to understand your title. Ok thanks.
My partner is Innestia JKPM. Her title is interesting and seems quite good to understand (the title is "Improving Student Speaking English skills using blended learning (video-blog) in second grade at SMA 4 Kendari, parts: Video-blog as a media for student in learning activity, Blended Learning as a method of English learning, Students' speaking english skill now in Indonesia). The general concept about vocabulary and English video-blog are arranged neatly because there are some quotes here and its explanation, and also the paraphrasing parts are easy to understand. The classification of methods here is simple but she can catch what it is mean. But in the part “Why video-blogs are chosen” and “Methods of Learning English Video-blogs”, it should be added with some expert quotes or quotes from previous research, because there are many researches about the using of English video-blog to improve learning process.
BalasHapusNAME: RONA FAJAR W.
REG. NUMBER: A1D2 11 079
Name : Rabianti
BalasHapusOff Number : A1D2 10 124
THE EFFECT OF ROUNDTABLE TECHNIQUE ON THE STUDENTS’ READING ACHIEVEMENT AT THE EIGHTH GRADE OF SMP NEGERI 5 KENDARI
My partner is Rahmatia. And this is Rahmatia’s comment:
I think your topic is very interesting and essay for us to understand, but there are some weakness there first is your topic is about reading. So I think you have to explain the definition of reading itself. In your paper you only explain about definition of your method, how to applying your method, the advantages of your method. And also in point 2.2 about steps of roundtable technique in teaching reading. In your paper you write that “in forming groups, the teacher asks students to form a group of four, how about if your students count is uneven (ganjil). I think that’s all. Thank you.
Name: Rahmatia
BalasHapusReg no: A1D2 10 108
IMPROVING STUDENTS WRITING SKILL USING FOUR SQUARE WRITING METHOD
My partner is Rabianti, and this her comment:
Your topic is very good. Also I think four square writing is very interested topic. But I find some weaknesses in your writing. First, you find many quotations in first point of your writing, but in four square method point you only have one quotation. I think you must add one or more quotations to make you basic clear. And second, I see some error in using of capital latter at your writing. Capital latter is important when we write people name and in the first latter each sentence. I think you must take attention in this weakness too. There are the weaknesses I can see from your writing. For all of your writing, I think is good.
name ; SUSMI
BalasHapusReg no: A1D2 11 125
my partner is Halfia, her little is in improving students reading comprehension through intensive reading technique. her the line-out is very interesting there are: types of reading, how to teach intensive reading,how to teaching reading at senior high school, and the advantage of intensive reading, her the explanation out line is clearly but she must limited the explained about how to teach intensive reading, beside that in out line the the advantage of intensive reading, she must explain more clearly because that not clearly. but I give suggestion to her, there are she must search more in the internet or same journal if want the explain the proposal will be clearly and can be good proposal.
NAME IS : HALFIA
BalasHapusREG.NO. : A1D211 033
THE EFFECT OF USING PICTURE ON STUDENTS VOCABULARY IMPROVEMENT AT THE FOUR CLASS.
My partner is susmi,your topic is very good,but after I correctly I find some mistake is don't understand because the words used high level,and my suggestion is your explanation in this writing you must limited explanation.
NAME : HALFIA
BalasHapusREG.NO : A1D211033
THE EFFECT OF USING PICTURE ON STUDENTS VOCABULARY IMPROVEMENT AT THE FOUR CLASS.
My partner is susmi,your topic is very good, but after I correctly I find some mistake is don't understand,because the words used high level and my suggestion is your explanation in this writing your must limited explanation.